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My name is Nagarjun M and most recently I have been working as a Senior System Engineer for Cognizant technology solutions. I hold a B.E degree in Electronics and communication engineering from Anna University.

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My name is Nagarjun M and most recently I have been working as a Senior System Engineer for Cognizant technology solutions. I hold a B.E degree in Electronics and communication engineering from Anna University. The undergraduate curriculum introduced me to a wide variety of subjects in the field of Computer science and data analysis. Various courses like Computer networks and Computer architecture has provided me an in-depth knowledge of how the world
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 I started learning python programming, I was more interested in practicing my coding skills in the data science applications
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