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There have been some problems with the bus servicing, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company, in your letter: 1. Describe what the problems are 2. Explain how these problems are affecting you 3. Suggest what you would like the company to do

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Dear Sir, I am writing to bring to your notice the situation residents of the Richardson community are facing with your company’s
bus
 services in the
last
 two weeks. For the past two weeks, your company has been delivering poor
service
 to us ranging from
bus
 drivers coming late, rude
bus
 attendants raising their voices at customers and top on the list being the continuous breakdown of more than fifteen of your buses while commuting passengers. While it is not news that
majority
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 of the adults in Richardson work in the city
center
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 and rely on your
bus
service
 to get to work, most families have their children enrolled in schools in the same city
center
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 with plans to use your company’s
service
 to get to their destinations early enough. With
this
 recent terrible
service
 delivery on your company’s part, many of us have received queries for late coming to work while a few missed important appointments. I would like to suggest that while it is not really possible to recruit new staff in the short term, train the current ones on efficient
service
 delivery and how to be
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 in all areas pertaining to your business operations
in addition
 to repairing or replacing the faulty buses. Thank you in anticipation of your prompt response. Yours faithfully, David Jones
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