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Housing is essential for people. Some people argue that the government should offer free housing for peope who cannot afford it. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #government #offer #peope
When discussing the issue of free housing for people who cannot afford it, one should bear in mind the complexity of the issue.
Although
 some believe that state programs to
support
 free housing is highly expensive, I believe it is a good initiative which should be applied. In
this
 essay, I will provide examples and arguments to
support
 my opinion. One argument to
support
 my claim, is that homeless people create a substantial financial burden on our society.
This
 could be prevented if the government will create a suitable housing program for needed people.
For example
, New-
york
the English royal house (a branch of the Plantagenet line) that reigned from 1461 to 1485; its emblem was a white rose
York
 city has opened a free housing program for those who have financial difficulties.
As a result
, the annual hospitalization rates due to hypothermia and substance abuse decreased by 20%.
This
 saved the city more
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 2 million dollars.
This
 example shows that by investing in state homes,
substantial amount
Suggestion
a substantial amount
 of money could be saved and directed to other national projects. Another point to
support
 my opinion, is that children
to
Suggestion
in
 families that cannot afford a house, do not have the same
oppurtunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
opportunity
 as others, and by providing them a safe place to stay, they can be
encorporated
formed or united into a whole
incorporated
 into the educational system. As an example, a child who is living on the streets, does not have the ability to go to school regularly.
However
, if the government will provide them a home, he will attend school and get a formal education.
This
 will
assit
give help or assistance; be of service
assist
 him later in life in
persuing
following in order to overtake or capture or as accompaniment to such pursuit
pursuing
person
Pershing
 a career and having a better chance in life.
This
 demonstrates that by giving families
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
 home, children could have better chances in life. In conclusion, I maintain that the government should spend more money on
national housing project
Suggestion
the national housing project
a national housing project
. By doing so, we will be able to help our children and promote our society.
This
 is the best option to help and promote
ou
of or belonging to us
our
a
 community.
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