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Studying online is far more effective than studying on campus. To what extent do you agree?

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Online learning is becoming popular these days than the traditional
classroom
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 teaching and its effectiveness is debatable. While many people prefer virtual learning, traditional teaching is
more suitable
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most suitable
 and effective.
This
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 essay will discuss the benefits of the
classroom
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 learning
environment
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. Undoubtedly, people now take up their classes virtually because it is easier and
also
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 one can study from the comfort of their homes. They believe that it is a lot stressful to travel from a location to attend lectures in schools.
However
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,
this
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 activity and notion among individuals have made them
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 the sight of
real education system
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the real education system
. A student studying from home could be distracted by
the the
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the
environment
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 which they are in at a particular time.
For instance
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, in our country Nigeria where there is usually
poor network
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the poor network
a poor network
 and high rate of environmental noise either from within or outside, could make one
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 concentration and focus to acquire good knowledge of that course at that time. Contrastingly, traditional teaching gives students the adequate learning
environment
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 where students can ask questions and get
immediate response
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an immediate response
, together with
indept
performed comprehensively and completely
in-depth
 knowledge and examples. Face to face learning creates room for an open discussion
to
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for
with
 both teachers and
students thereby
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students, thereby
, giving room for proper understanding of the topic taught.
Furthermore
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, proper monitoring measures
is done
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are done
 to ensure the consistency and willingness of teachers in
carring
move while supporting, either in a vehicle or in one's hands or on one's body
carrying
 out their work effectively. Most people learn better while present in class, than taking online classes. On a final note, the normal
classroom
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 learning and its impact
to
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on
 students cannot be over emphasized. Online learning is
easier but
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easier, but
 the effectiveness and advantages of traditional teaching
is
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are
 more productive and supervisor
therefore
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, I strongly agree that
classroom
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 teaching has a positive impact
to
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on
 people and as well to the academic
environment
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.
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