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some people say thay it is better to promote healthy lifestyle than spend so much money treat obese people. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays, people believe that it is
preference
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preferred
 in promoting healthy
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
behaviours
 than spending a great deal of money to treat overweight people. I totally agree with
this
 statement because it
help
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helps
 improve public health and save national budget. One of the main reasons is that it is the best way to save budget of a country.
First
, since a sustainable development of
nation
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a nation
the nation
nations
 requires to have many investments in many fields, paying for
treat
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treating
 obesity can put more burden on financial resource.
This
 means that if
citizen
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citizens
a citizen
 have a knowledge about balance
diets combination
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diets, combination
 with physical activities,
government
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the government
 will not need to spent million to cure these obese
individual
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individuals
. Another reason is that healthy lifestyles help people enhance expectation of life. In
other
(often plural) a command given by a superior (e.g., a military or law enforcement officer) that must be obeyed
order
 to improving
community’s longevity
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the community’s longevity
, healthy meals not only help people avoid corpulence but
also
 other diseases that may be fatal
for
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to
human’s
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human
 health. In fact, people have good eating habit as well as consume other high
fiber
a slender and greatly elongated substance capable of being spun into yarn
fibre
 food,
such
 as fresh fruit, vegetables leading to reduce fat, provide vitamin which play vital role
for
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in
bodies
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body
 development and optimum immune system.
For instance
, consume enough Vitamin E which
help
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helps
 people to slower their aging process or prevent cancers. In conclusion, because of
many benefits
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the many benefits
 like
save
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to save
 money for government, improve community
healthy
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health
 as well, so government should broaden citizen horizon more than spend money in
treatment
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treating
 obesity.

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