Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think it is better to work for different organization. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Although
quite a number of people
works
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work
in the same workplace throughout their active years while others considered it more advantageous not to work for the same institution.
This
essay will discuss both options and I will give my own view. In the
first
place
, people that are employed in the same workplace till retirement have the privilege of enjoying stabilization at work.
For example
, working as a medical officer in a
place
for 35 years, you would have familiarized yourself with the
place
, your staff temperament will not be an issue to cope with and you will know how to get things done
compare
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compared
to a newcomer. The effect of
this
will be smooth running of the organization and situation arising in the job will be under your control.
On the other hand
, fatigue and over-familiarization can result. Doing
same thing
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the same thing
in the same
place
makes an individual to be sick and not to have
sense
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a sense
of purpose and life becomes routine
instead
of purpose.
However
, doing jobs in various places makes an individual to gain experience and to be exposed to
different state
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a different state
-of-the-art-technology.
For example
, a doctor working in different centres as a surgeon will be exposed to different equipments which one hospital might not have at a time.
This
will result in more skills and experience in different cases as an expert. The drawback of
this
is that, you might not get things done
easily especially
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easily, especially
given the period when trying to adapt to
new environment
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a new environment
which might lead to adjustment disorders. On balance, I would suggest that rather than changing jobs frequently, or work in a
place
till retirement, workers should have a valid indication
for
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of
changing jobs so as to ensure smooth running of the organization and in cases of threat to life or occupational hazards, job conversion and even relocation is inevitable.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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