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It is better for university students to live away from home during their university studies rather than staying with their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, moving out to another place for pursuing higher education has become a common trend. It poses a dilemma before the majority of us. In my opinion the latter is far more
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 as it opens one up to a wide range of prospects.
This
 essay will talk about the reasons to support my agreement. There are innumerable cases wherein people from rural areas with simple personalities have been
molded
shaped to fit by or as if by altering the contours of a pliable mass (as by work or effort)
moulded
 into dynamic thinkers and problem solvers. There have been many
people including
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people, including
 various famous personalities who gained sophistication and were transformed after living away from their homes, on their own.
This
 genuinely proves how a student living away from home can or has to transform himself. Keeping in mind situations when no one else is around to offer
direct unconditional
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direct, unconditional
 help as parents do.
In addition
 to
this
, when students need to spread their wings to soar in the sky of successes and failures, they need to go out and get their own experiences. They need to understand the world for themselves while managing their limited finances.
This
first
-hand experience teaches them about tackling different situations and grappling with all sorts of challenges with dexterity.
This
 falsifies the apprehensions and hypothetical worries of their parents about them. As a matter of fact,
this
 is possible only if they get an opportunity to live on their own away from the patronizing home atmosphere.
Finally
, students living with parents owing to lack of finances may be, or any other reason whatsoever, might not get
such
 an opportunity. But in
such
 cases, they always have other ways to achieve a wholesome personality development. To sum it up, it is highly necessary to stay away from one’s home during the course of higher education, as of course, it is the base
to
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for
 their future, especially, professional life.

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