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Economic growth is the only way to end world poverty. However, some people say it leads to environment damage and should be stopped. discuss both ideas and give your own opinion.

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Economic
growth
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 and preservation of the nature is often conflicted. Some people believe that world poverty could be ended by economic
growth
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, while others believe that economic
growth
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 should be ceased since it consequence
to
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of
 environmental damage. In
this
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 essay, I will present
both
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 views and explain my view. To
starting
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start
 with, economic
growth
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 brings in
money which
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money, which
 allows government or
individual
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an individual
individually
individuals
 to improve people’s
living
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lives
. In many countries, children in lower income family do not have a chance to study because they have to earn money for livings. When those children grow up, they couldn’t find better jobs
either since
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either, since
 they did not go to school and earn any diplomas. They could only work as
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 and remain in the lower class – social inequality continues.
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, if those children went to school and learnt knowledge, they might have opportunities to receive better jobs, which earn more money, and transfer to a higher social
classes
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class
.
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, it is true that economic
growth
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 has negative influences. Development of cities caused environmental damage.
For example
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, recent fire in
Brazil which
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Brazil, which
 burnt down acres of Amazon rain forest is said to be set for cultivation purpose. The fire affected many animal species and caused extinctions for some rare species. Is true on
both
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 ends that economic
growth
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 has
both
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 positive and negative
impact
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impacts
. From my opinion, sacrificing nature
for
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of
 economic
growth
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 and giving up the chance to improve livings in order to save
environment
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the environment
 are
both
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 too extreme. It may be hard, but I believe there is a balance point between economic
growth
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 and preservation of the wild that ought to be found.
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