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Some people believe that museums and historic sites should be open for free for children under 18 years of age. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that some countries have free
access
 to museums and historic sites for all people regardless the age. There are
also
 countries that have no free
access
 to any of the public sites at all. While I consider both facts as unnecessary extremes, I highly support the idea of fee waivers in
such
 places for children under 18 to boost
education
level
 among the youngsters and to broaden their horizons regardless the
level
 of wealth. It is certainly important for all children to gain knowledge without any kind of impediments. While the adults have a financial position to pay for knowledge, the youth does not have the material means to exchange for
education
.
Moreover
, granting
access
 for young generation to different sources of information, including museums and historic places, increases the general
level
 of
education
 among the students and the pupils.
For instance
, in the countries with free
access
 to museums and historic ruins, the observed
level
 of national
education
 is much higher than the
level
 of
education
 in the countries that do not have it, according to the Global
Education
 Survey.
Secondly
, as young apprentices get more understanding of the world around them through easy
access
 to museums and other cultural sites, they better apprehend the path to follow in their near future.
On the contrary
, in the countries with no free cultural objects for children a possibility to start a wrong career is much higher than in other countries.
For example
, in
such
 states the governments spend more money to finance courses, which let people to gain skills other than were learned during the initial formal studies. To conclude, allowing citizens under 18 to freely visit public repositories of cultural heritage does not only aid younger generation to enhance its
level
 of theoretical knowledge, but
also
 to choose right professions. It is beneficial on both the personal and the public levels.
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