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People argue that team sports should be a part of the school timetable for children rather than individual sports such as swimming or running. Do you agree or disagree?

Sport
Suggestion
Spirit
 is the most important part of life. Some people prefer having sports period during the
school
Use synonyms
 studies while, others like to have it an individual part of life.
However
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, I strongly agree that sports should be part of the daily
school
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 routine is more beneficial. Admittedly, there are numerous benefits of having sport periods in between other subjects.
Firstly
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, students would feel exhausted if there will be no sports or entertainment during the whole week. Usually the periods in schools are comprised of forty minutes each and if there will be no sports activity, the students may feel irritated and
as a result
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, students might not be able to concentrate and give their maximum output in studies.
For example
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, children these days have different days in their time table
such
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 as colour
day
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, sports
day
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 or cricket periods along with
normal routine
Suggestion
normal routines
the normal routine
.
Hence
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, it is compulsory to add sports or other relating activities in order to keep students active and devoted towards their studies.
Moreover
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, keeping sports individually will not be useful, as it would be time consuming and would require long
day
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 to perform
such
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 activities one by one. Not only
this
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 but
also
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 there is a high
chances
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chance
 that
student
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students
a student
 who do not take
interest
Suggestion
an interest
 in sports will be absent on
such
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day
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 which will disturb consistency towards
school
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 routine.
For instance
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, the
school
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 annual schedules have one or two maximum sports week in a whole year rather sport
days
Suggestion
day
 every week to avoid disturbance in student’s routine.
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Thus it
Accept comma addition
Thus, it
 is more beneficial having short periods of sport along with studies. In conclusion, sports is playing widely these days in every
school
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 on a daily or weekly
basis but
Accept comma addition
basis, but
 I totally agree with having sports with the daily
time table
a schedule listing events and the times at which they will take place
timetable
 in order
to maintain children
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to maintain a child's
to maintain child's
to maintain children's
 interest in the studies.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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