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Many people believe that cooking is an essential life skill and should be taught to boys and girls in schools. Others disagree and believe it is a waste of school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In today`s world
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 due to technological advancements, everyone should learn various life skills to compete in every subject. Some people are of the view that cooking must be taught to the students in educational institutions. I do agree with
this
 notion. I would like to explain my opinion in the subsequent paragraphs. Undoubtedly, students are more stressed due to heavy academic curriculum, and adding more subjects can create pressure on their minds. They do not want to learn practical subjects like cooking. At the tender age of adolescence, they do not put efforts and do not want to know the importance of making food.
However
, cooking is an art, some pupils might have interest in it and learn
this
 skill. It may result in excellent chefs in the future. At the teenage, children are more creative. Their creativity can produce innovative ideas and,
this
 may produce signature dishes.
Moreover
, in my view, developing culinary skills at
this
 age, can make them intellectually strong. They become self-independent as they are not dependent on others for their basic needs. If they know how to make food
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 they can easily live on their own
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 when they go to another place for
further
 studies or job. To conclude, cooking is a basic need in today`s world, So, it must be taught in
schools but
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schools, but
 not as a mandatory subject but as an activity. It will not pressurize students academically.
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