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International MARKETING IS SOME TIME SEEN AS INVASIVE AND AN INTRUSION INTO THE COUNTRY IN QUESTION. Other argue that it is necessary and economical form of education. in addition to spreading ideas, language and culture. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#time #intrusion #country #form #education #addition #language #culture
With the passage of time,
world
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the world
 is becoming a global village. Cosmopolitan
campaign
 is a booming trend. For opponents it
is seem
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seems
 as encroaching approach to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 nation boundaries.
On the other hand
, supporters argue that it is mandatory for economic boost of the
country
 as it brings
new thought
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new thoughts
a new thought
, diverse language and different cultural norms. In my
opinion both
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opinion, both
 sides of the coin are debatable. As international
trade
 invades the local
economy
 of the
country it
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country, it
 definitely has its positive and negative impact on local industry. To embark on, international
trade
 opens new opportunities of jobs and skills, it indirectly boosts financial wellbeing of the local people which mostly belong to a developing
country
. Along with
boost
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boosting
 to
economy
 these marketing
campaign
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campaigns
 bring new ideas, introduce different forms of communication and cultural norms.
For instance
,
English though
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English, though
mother tongue
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the mother tongue
 of Europe, is now spoken all over the world due to cross
boundaries
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boundary
trade
. International cuisines are
also
 a pronounced effect of global marketing. Without any doubt these
campaign
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campaigns
 among different countries provide a vast horizon of different trends, languages, cultures and norms. On the flip side, international marketing sometimes affects
economy
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the economy
 of
native
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the native country
country
 as
parasite
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a parasite
parasites
.
it
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It
 penetrates the
economy
 so intensely that colours of ethics and culture of own
country
diminishes
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diminish
 in which marketing is encroaching. Native people of that
country though
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country, though
 get
jobs but
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jobs, but
 on lower wages and job benefits. It
also
 reduces
opportunity
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opportunities
the opportunity
of
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for
 the local industry to be prosperous.
In other words
, international
trade
 campaigns are major competitors
to
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in
 the local market. Have we seen any person unaware with the name of Gucci and Gap? People spend money on brands regardless that they have
better
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the best
 product and material in their own
country
. So do with the language and culture. To conclude, international marketing though
bring
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brings
 diversity in the form of language, culture and
trends but
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trends, but
 it
also
 has penetrating role in
others
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
country
's boundaries and
economy
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the economy
. In my opinion whether we accept them or not in our
country
 we have to see
these
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this campaign
these campaigns
campaign
 all around us it is more debatable that these marketing trends should have some boundaries during their campaigns and every
country
 must have some legislation to control their intrusion.

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