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Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lessen pressure on the world’s fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is undeniable fact that the prices of fuels have
rose
come into existence; take on form or shape
arisen
 in the past few decades. It is often disputed by many people that
fuel
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 price hike is the only way to reduce the consumption of fuels while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 do not agree with
this
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.
Nevertheless
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, I believe that in today's globalised world, there are numbers of alternatives available that can be helpful for reducing
fuel
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 consumption. There are numbers of measures that can be taken to overcome the excessive
usage
Suggestion
use
 of fuels.
First
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 and foremost is that,
Government
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the government
the Government
 can create awareness about more and more use of public transportation rather than using individual vehicle. Apparently, it would help to reduce traffic complications as well as pollution.
Second
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, higher authorities can introduce eco-friendly vehicles like electric cars and motorbikes which diminish the overall use of fuels.
For instance
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, Tesla cars are introduced by many countries to curb the extravagant use of
fuel
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 which run by electricity.
Moreover
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, if
person
Suggestion
a person
the person
 comprehends the value of fossil fuels, it would be fruitful and can
also
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 hinder utilisation of
fuel
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.
Hence
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, these are the alternatives that can be taken
in
Suggestion
into
 account at personal level alongside government bodies.
On the other hand
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,
hike
Suggestion
the hike
 in price
fuel
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 may enhance complications in people's lives. To initiate with, if
further
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 increase in
cost
Suggestion
the cost
 of
fuels
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fuels, then
then
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 it would be arduous for commuters to commute in daily life. What is more, they may face difficulties in many ways.
Additionally
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, no doubt it will help to decrease usage of natural resources, but rather becomes complicated for many people. To sum up,
increase
Suggestion
an increase
 in the money of
fuel
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 does not bring good results.
Although
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, can be mitigated by using suitable transportation ways that I
also
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 assert.

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