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More and more athletes are using drugs to enhance their performance. What do you think are the reasons and effects of this?

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Performance enhancing
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drugs
 are really a matter of serious concern in today`s sports world. There are many reasons,
due to
 which
the
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sportsmen take illegal
supplements
. These
supplements
 are detrimental
for
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 human health. They are taken by many persons in numerous ways just to boost their confidence and to attain name and fame.
Firstly
, everyone wants to be in
top
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 position, so they use a plethora of techniques and achieve success by taking illegal medicines and by
practicing
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 very little in a particular event. Athletes, nowadays, use shortcuts to achieve triumph rather than doing
hard-work
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.
Furthermore
, for unfair advantages, like for ultra-endurance training, people take the aid of tablets, which
facilitate
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 them with unrealistic goals.
For instance
, some weight lifters take
supplements
 like protein powder, just to make their body well-built quickly.
However
, these
performance enhancing
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drugs
 affect the health of every person in the worst ways
like
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they may end up
with
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breaking
of
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the tendon or their bodies may crash, after powerful and vigorous exercise. Some
supplements
 are steroids, they can cause weight gain and can be harmful
for
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 the heart and liver as well. These
drugs
 decline the significance of
performance based
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 skills and sports because the person who is on
supplements
 can achieve big aims unlike
by
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a person who does not take any
such
 things and
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average
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 body.
To conclude
, the medicines, which
improves
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improve
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performance
 in athletics, decrease the energy efficiency of the body.
In addition
, they give temporary success and happiness. So to have permanent contentment and victory, one must not take undue advantage of these
drugs
 and should aim at realistic goals.
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task response
The essay partially addresses the reasons and effects of using performance-enhancing drugs in sports. The response could be more thorough and explore the topic in more depth.
coherence and cohesion
The essay lacks a clear overall structure and coherence. It would benefit from improved paragraph organization and more cohesive linkers to improve the flow of ideas.

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