More and more athletes are using drugs to enhance their performance. What do you think are the reasons and effects of this?
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Performance enhancing
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Performance-enhancing
drugs
are really a matter of serious concern in today`s sports world. There are many reasons, Use synonyms
due to
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the
sportsmen take illegal Correct article usage
apply
supplements
. These Use synonyms
supplements
are detrimental Use synonyms
for
human health. They are taken by many persons in numerous ways just to boost their confidence and to attain name and fame.
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to
Firstly
, everyone wants to be in Linking Words
top
position, so they use a plethora of techniques and achieve success by taking illegal medicines and by Add an article
a top
the top
practicing
very little in a particular event. Athletes, nowadays, use shortcuts to achieve triumph rather than doing Change the spelling
practising
hard-work
. Correct your spelling
hard work
Furthermore
, for unfair advantages, like for ultra-endurance training, people take the aid of tablets, which Linking Words
facilitate
them with unrealistic goals. Correct subject-verb agreement
facilitates
For instance
, some weight lifters take Linking Words
supplements
like protein powder, just to make their body well-built quickly.
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However
, these Linking Words
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performance enhancing
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performance-enhancing
drugs
affect the health of every person in the worst ways Use synonyms
like
they may end up Correct word choice
apply
with
breaking Change preposition
apply
of
the tendon or their bodies may crash, after powerful and vigorous exercise. Some Change preposition
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supplements
are steroids, they can cause weight gain and can be harmful Use synonyms
for
the heart and liver as well. These Change the preposition
to
drugs
decline the significance of Use synonyms
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performance based
skills and sports because the person who is on Add a hyphen
performance-based
supplements
can achieve big aims unlike Use synonyms
by
a person who does not take any Change preposition
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such
things and Linking Words
have
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has
average
body.
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an average
To conclude
, the medicines, which Linking Words
improves
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improve
performance
in athletics, decrease the energy efficiency of the body. Use synonyms
In addition
, they give temporary success and happiness. So to have permanent contentment and victory, one must not take undue advantage of these Linking Words
drugs
and should aim at realistic goals.Use synonyms
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