some people think sense of competition in children should be encouraged, other believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People have different views about upbringing of children. Some say that children should be motivated for
competition
, while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
think that cooperation is more important to be encouraged in children.
This
essay will discuss both
view points
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoints
in subsequent paragraph and conclusion will be made. To start with, people who think that sense of
competition
should be motivated in children depict following ideas.
Firstly
,
competition
teach
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teaches
children how to deal difficult situation
soliditary
.
Secondaly
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Secondly
, It
maintain
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maintains
excitement
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the excitement
and zeal among the children. After that, sometimes
competition
becomes
neccessary
absolutely essential
necessary
.
For example
, in sports one has to win and
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
has to lose. So they think it helps children in every aspect of their
life
because most of the time one has to deal obstacle of his
life
own
located at or attached to
on
his own.
On the other hand
, some argue that
competition
makes children selfish and it makes children isolated
,
Accept space
,
however
, cooperation encourages
sense
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a sense
of harmony, respect each other and work in teams. They
also
think what people learn in their childhood stick together with them for whole
life
.
Moreover
, children who study in groups get more marks than who study alone.
For instance
, there is a report on students from South Asia that 78% of pupils who study in groups get better grades. In conclusion,
although
there are
handful
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a handful
of people who think that
competition
is more important due to the fact it teaches children to get out of difficult situation alone.
Nevertheless
, I believe cooperation helps children more to become a successful person in
life
.
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