some people think sense of competition in children should be encouraged, other believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People have different views about upbringing of children. Some say that children should be motivated for

competition

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, while

other

plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned

others

think that cooperation is more important to be encouraged in children.

This

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essay will discuss both

view points

a mental position from which things are viewed

viewpoints

in subsequent paragraph and conclusion will be made. To start with, people who think that sense of

competition

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should be motivated in children depict following ideas.

Firstly

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competition

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teach

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teaches

children how to deal difficult situation

soliditary

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Secondaly

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Secondly

, It

maintain

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maintains

excitement

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the excitement

and zeal among the children. After that, sometimes

competition

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becomes

neccessary

absolutely essential

necessary

For example

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, in sports one has to win and

other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

has to lose. So they think it helps children in every aspect of their

life

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because most of the time one has to deal obstacle of his

life

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own

located at or attached to

his own.

On the other hand

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, some argue that

competition

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makes children selfish and it makes children isolated

Accept space

however

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, cooperation encourages

sense

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a sense

of harmony, respect each other and work in teams. They

also

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think what people learn in their childhood stick together with them for whole

life

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Moreover

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, children who study in groups get more marks than who study alone.

For instance

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, there is a report on students from South Asia that 78% of pupils who study in groups get better grades. In conclusion,

although

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there are

handful

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a handful

of people who think that

competition

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is more important due to the fact it teaches children to get out of difficult situation alone.

Nevertheless

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, I believe cooperation helps children more to become a successful person in

life

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

251 words

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