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due to increasing density of living areas in a city,most residents are suffering from physical and social dangers.consequently, they are against living in the city. to what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Due to a vast increase in the population in a
city
, there is a plethora of dangers that face residents physically and socially, so few are against to live in urban areas. I completely agree with the above statement, where it effects on
health
 and the economy. People are more interested in accommodating in availability of high facilities
such
 as, education, employment and other resources. But, there are many disadvantages that will have an effect on
health
. In high technology
city
 many transport facilities are available, which increase in traffic congestion, and
also
 increase pollution. Due to
this
 it effect on the
health
 of the people who live.
For instance
, recent survey states that residents in
city
 areas have more
health
 problems
such
 as, lung cancer, heart diseases due to the environmental changes.
Additionally
, it
also
 effects on mental disturbances due to noise pollution.
Furthermore
, it
also
 has an impact on the economy. Due to high population expenses are increased and rural people cannot rent a house in a
city
 due to their low income, and cost of the goods they purchase are expensive.
For example
, a product is very cheap in rural areas than compared to urban areas, which is quite expensive.
In addition
 to
this
, society is different from village areas, because urban people do not believe in supernatural abilities.
Thus
, living in well developed area has many negative aspects, and cannot live in an efficient way. To conclude, I completely agree that high populated areas have drawbacks in terms of physical
health
 like diseases, and socially with respect to the economy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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