Many parents believe that when their children read books for entertainment, they are wasting their time, and that they should only read serious, educational books. What is your opinion about this?

Nowadays, children usually entertain by playing
videos game
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video games
video game
a video game
or watching
Youtube
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YouTube
,
however
, some children tell that reading
book
is theirs
hobbie
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Hobbie
. Following that
hobbie
an auxiliary activity
hobby
hope
Hobbes
, many parents think children should read
academic
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an academic book
academic books
book
to study as well
as reading
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as reading a book
book
for entertainment waste time. In my opinion, books contain more things than
you
of you or yourself
your
image. The statement that children should only read education
book
of
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for
parents
isnot
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is not
wrong at all because they all want their
daugter
a female human offspring
daughter
daughters
and son enjoy other
activites
any specific behavior
activities
,
for example
: playing
musical instrument
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a musical instrument
, playing sports, listening to music,.. By the way,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
donot
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do not
believe that reading
book
for entertainment wastes time.
Book
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The book
A book
isnot
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is not
created by the page full of meaningless words, it opens the new interesting
world
for readers who fall into it. Have you ever heard about the famous
series Harry
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series, Harry
Potter by J.K Rolling? It was the best
fantascy
imagination unrestricted by reality
fantasy
masterpiece of our century and every ages go crazy about the wizard's
world
,
moreover
, Harry Potter is
transfered
transfer somebody to a different position or location of work
transferred
into
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onto
film. Therefor,
book
isnot
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is not
just boring academic
knowledge wasting
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knowledge, wasting
your time, it is the box of information waiting for you to explore.
Novel
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The novel
A novel
isnot only increase
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is not only increasing
is not only increase
has not only increased
children's
imagination but
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imagination, but
also
improve their knowledge about the outside
world
.
Besides
that, these popular Japanese comics like Doraemon, Naruto, Dragon Balls,...
attracts
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Attracts
children all around the
world
and we can deny the entertainment of
book
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the book
. There are many kinds of
hobbie
an auxiliary activity
hobbies
hobby
and reading
book
is one of all,
however
, parents
shouldnot
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should not
let children stay all day in the house with
book
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a book
books
the book
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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