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In developing countries growing population is a significant problem should government provide new homes in cities or countries?

#countries #population #government #homes #cities
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Most of the developing countries facing number of issues with their population growth. Especially
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 the countries like India
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china
a communist nation that covers a vast territory in eastern Asia; the most populous country in the world
China
 struggling to fulfil their citizens basic needs in the everyday life. Every year the high concentration of public moving towards to metropolitan or urban which aggregate the shortage of resources
furher
to or at a greater extent or degree or a more advanced stage ('further' is used more often than 'farther' in this abstract sense)
further
.According to the agencies reports
says
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say
 that these
migration
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migrations
 were uneven and
subsequently
 would lead the
space
 shortage
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traffic congestion and increased water demand
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etc.
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Etc.
However
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 the migration behaviours are inevitable due to basic survival needs of
human
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humanity
. So what
government
 has to do with
this
? The
government
 should have control over on
this
 development through stringent regulations and proper centralized planning
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 Some experts advised that public authorities
has take
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has taken
have taken
 the some initiative to construct the multi-storey flats which could be
accommodate
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accommodated
 more person in the town.
On the other hand
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the fertile agriculture land are encroached by new construction activity. Where as
farmer
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the farmer
a farmer
 has no more interest to do the agriculture activity with huge financial losses. In additions these
formers
a person who operates a farm
farmers
also
 moving to cities with new hope to find the other alternatives.
Thus
, the
government
 shall evaluate the present
space
 issues and
devlope
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
developed
develops
 the
polices
a plan of action adopted by an individual or social group
policies
 to guide the sustainable future construction activity
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 For an example
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 Our Indian
government
 directly involved in the
poilet
someone who is licensed to operate an aircraft in flight
pilot
 construction project for deprived people
of
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in
 society. In additions, private and movement collaboration required to solve
this
space
 constraints. In conclusion, I believe that certain extend
government
 has responsibility to arrange the
space
 for dwelling for their people. Despite the urban or rural side, the
space
 shall be managed efficiently without destroying the agricultural land
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • growing population
  • significant problem
  • developing countries
  • new homes
  • cities
  • countries
  • rural areas
  • evenly
  • infrastructure
  • housing facilities
  • private sector
  • affordable housing projects
  • strict population control measures
  • sustainable
  • eco-friendly housing solutions
  • collaborate
  • international organizations
  • housing needs
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