Nowadays, adults do little exercise. Some people believe that the best way to address this issue is by covering great sports events such as the Olympics on television. Others think that it is more beneficial to take other measures. What is your opinion?

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Lazyness

Suggestion

Laziness

happened among the grown – ups these days.

However

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Accept space

while a solution for

this

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is spread the information about big

sport

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games like Olympics on TV. It

is argue

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is argued

argues

that there are other methods that a lot of useful solutions like holding a small

sport

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game in the area that we live or put up a contest for everyone to join in. I believe that there are many helpful ways to solve

this

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problem rather than give information about huge

sport

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games.

First

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, there are many channels about

sport

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games, but they are mostly watched by the old people.

In addition

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, they watch

sport

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shows for their entertainment, the game has not encouraged them to training.

For example

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, my grandfather like to know more detail about of

sport

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games,

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however he

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however, he

doesn’t want to practice like players but just a mean to entertain.

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, free

sport

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centers

an area that is approximately central within some larger region

centres

and

sport

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events, improvement of the sports facilities are likely welcomed by the people and change the way people live.

Furthermore

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, old age people can participate in free

sport

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center

an area that is approximately central within some larger region

centre

to exercise to get healthy.

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, adults will come and practice outdoor activities with their families like swimming, running and jogging because they feel better and

less loneliness

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less lonely

For example

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, my father

always take

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always takes

part in with me when I do my exercises daily. In conclusion, people watch

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sport

Suggestion

sports

shows for less lazy is not a good option.

Instead

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that opening more free sports

centers

an area that is approximately central within some larger region

centres

and spending time with the

others make

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others, make

physical training more efficient and entertaining.

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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258 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

sedentary lifestyle
high-profile
public awareness campaigns
gym memberships
workplace initiatives
government policies
tax incentives
local community events
physical activity
accessibility
motivation
successful athletes
broadcasting
inspire
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