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The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Governments in some countries spend large amounts of
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 on
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 exploration programmes. I completely agree with the idea that these are a waste of
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, and that the funds should be allocated to public services. There are several reasons why
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 programmes should be abandoned.
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, it is extremely expensive to train scientists and other staff involved with
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 missions, and facilities and equipment
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 come at a huge cost to the government.
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, these programmes do not benefit normal people in our daily lives; they are simply vanity projects for politicians.
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, many missions to
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 fail completely, and the smallest technological error can cost astronauts their lives. The Challenger
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 shuttle disaster showed us that
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 travel is extremely dangerous, and in my opinion it is not worth the risk. I believe that the
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 from
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 programmes should go to vital public services
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. It is much cheaper to train doctors, teachers, police and other public service workers than it is to train astronauts or the scientists and engineers who work on
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 exploration projects.
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, public servants do jobs that have a positive impact on every member of society.
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, we all use schools, hospitals and roads, and we all need the security that the police provide. If governments reallocated the
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 spent on
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 travel and research, many thousands of people could be lifted out of poverty or given a better quality of life. In conclusion, my view is that governments should spend
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 on services that benefit all members of society, and it is wrong to waste resources on projects that do not improve our everyday lives.
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