The qualities and skills that a person requires to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or other academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The requirements that people need to achieve

wealthy

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wealth

in these days cannot be taught in higher education

such

as colleges or universities. I agree many things that we must learn outside the school in order to success, but I do not think that the knowledge is learned inside academic institutions aren’t necessary in the modern world. There is

reason

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a reason

why should students study more about the knowledge of

outside world

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the outside world

. After graduated, individuals, which have

high degree

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a high degree

as a result

of hard working in universities, are being rejected because lack of experience in

work

by the companies. Especially, their skills only focus on

deal

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dealing

with problems in a direct way but not in alternative ways.

For example

, the employee can answer what exactly the time of their partners

arrive

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arrives

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the company, while the boss needs more information about their numbers of people, their place

for

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stay or their plan when they arrived. In my opinion, students need to

work

for part-time jobs, and get more experience in order to know how thing

work

On the other hand

, the things that we obtain while study in schools are not in

vain because

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vain, because

most of them still used in

work

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the work

. Many subjects that appeared in school are related to the fundamental in every job.

For instance

, accountants need to know what is mathematic because the job is

require

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required

or biologists must learn about biology in order to

understanding

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understand

natural

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nature

. If people

are not known

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do not know

don't know

all about the fundamental of their jobs, they will suffer when advance

further

in their

work

. In conclusion, I believe the road to success required not only the knowledge that learned

inside

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school but

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school, but

also

need to study from outside, and improve the skills we obtain through our everyday lives.

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1Word repetition
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16Grammar mistakes
 

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Real-world experience
Adaptability
Resilience
Networking
Interpersonal skills
Creative thinking
Innovation
Self-learning
Continuous improvement
Emotional intelligence
Empathy
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Academic curricula
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The qualities and skills that a person requires to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or other academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Sme people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reason for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Some people say that studying at school is not important because most important things are learnt outside the school. Do you agree or disagree?

Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. What problems are caused by this issue? What can be done to solve this situation?