The qualities and skills that a person requires to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or other academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The requirements that people need to achieve

wealthy

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wealth

in these days cannot be taught in higher education

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as colleges or universities. I agree many things that we must learn outside the school in order to success, but I do not think that the knowledge is learned inside academic institutions aren’t necessary in the modern world. There is

reason

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a reason

why should students study more about the knowledge of

outside world

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the outside world

. After graduated, individuals, which have

high degree

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a high degree

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of hard working in universities, are being rejected because lack of experience in

work

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by the companies. Especially, their skills only focus on

deal

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dealing

with problems in a direct way but not in alternative ways.

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, the employee can answer what exactly the time of their partners

arrive

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arrives

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the company, while the boss needs more information about their numbers of people, their place

for

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stay or their plan when they arrived. In my opinion, students need to

work

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for part-time jobs, and get more experience in order to know how thing

work

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, the things that we obtain while study in schools are not in

vain because

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vain, because

most of them still used in

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work

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the work

. Many subjects that appeared in school are related to the fundamental in every job.

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, accountants need to know what is mathematic because the job is

require

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required

or biologists must learn about biology in order to

understanding

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understand

natural

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nature

. If people

are not known

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do not know

don't know

all about the fundamental of their jobs, they will suffer when advance

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in their

work

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. In conclusion, I believe the road to success required not only the knowledge that learned

inside

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school but

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school, but

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need to study from outside, and improve the skills we obtain through our everyday lives.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

293 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Real-world experience
Adaptability
Resilience
Networking
Interpersonal skills
Creative thinking
Innovation
Self-learning
Continuous improvement
Emotional intelligence
Empathy
Traditional academic settings
Academic curricula
Structured nature
Lifelong learning
Rapidly changing industries
Leadership
Teamwork

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The qualities and skills that a person requires to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or other academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

In recent times, economic growth has helped many become richer, both in developed and developing countries. However, those in developed countries are not as happy as they were in the past. Why is this? What can be learned from this?

As compared to the past, children these days spend more of their leisure time indoors with computures and TV and less time outdoors. Describe some of the problems this lack of outdoor leisure time can cause and suggest at least one possible solution.

ou are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports centre that you visit. Write a letter to the manager. - What the problem is - How you feel about the problem - What steps you want the manager to take

Advertising is becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is it a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, more and more business meetings and business training are taking place online. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?