Modern society is becoming more concerned about the increase in juvenile crime. what do you think is the cause of the increase in juvenile crime? what solutions can you suggest.

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In
this
modern world, there is
major concern
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a major concern
to the society about
increase
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the increase
an increase
in the crimes of children. The main reasons for these
violation
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violations
is lack of education and employment, and due to mentally instable. As the world is developing, there is an increase in the crime rate, but the major concern is
children
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child
violence.
Firstly
, the main common reason is education of the victim. An
illeterate
not able to read or write
illiterate
can commit crimes due to lack of employment due to which the expenses cannot be paid for the needs, which results in committing robbery and
threat
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a threat
threats
to others, especially children.
For instance
, children are kidnapped by an unknown and blackmailed for money.
Furthermore
, the other reason is
revenge which
Accept comma addition
revenge, which
is rare in these days.
For example
, a person commits
crime
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the crime
of a child because of his debt to his parents.
Although
, there are many reasons which are
threatning
threatening or foreshadowing evil or tragic developments
threatening
to children, but there are solutions.
Firstly
, the government should take serious action for the safety
to
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of
child
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children
the child
a child
by implementing severe punishments.
For example
,
victim
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the victim
victims
should be punished for his whole life in jail for
commiting
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
committing
threat to children. Addition to
this, society and
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this society, and
parents need to take care of their children before going to unknown areas, and do not trust and
pursuaded
a person who is being chased
pursued
by candies.
children
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Children
are
need
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needed
to teach to be in a
crowd
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crowded
places but
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place, but
place but
not in enclosed areas, so
danger
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dangerous
conflicts cannot be placed.
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