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Some people think children's spending time on TV, video and PC games is good, while others think it is terrible. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The way children spend their leisure
time
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 significantly changed due to the introduction of
computer
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 devices. While some people support the idea of young people spending
time
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 on watching
TV
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, video and playing games, others disagree with the habit.
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 essay will discuss both views and explain the reasons why it negatively affects children. In
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 modern world, everything is technology-orientated,
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, the
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 of these
computer
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 devices is somewhat unavoidable.
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, it is important for children to learn how to
use
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 them wisely. As there are a variety of educational materials available on
TV
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 programs and on the Internet, it is recommended to
use
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 these resources to promote children's learning. Even at schools, the usage of tablets and computers are increasingly popular as a mean of education, and many children are enthusiastic about engaging in the learning activities using the
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 technology.
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, if it is used correctly, children can spend meaningful
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 on these electrical devices.
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, its detrimental effects need to be addressed. It is common for young generation to stay inside and watch
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 or play
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 games, rather than engaging in physical activities with friends outside.
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 physical inactivity negatively affects children's health, leading to some health issues
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 as obesity and early onset of type 2 diabetes.
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, some information on
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 shows and websites is not suitable for younger users in terms of sexuality and violence, name not but a few. For these reasons, children should not be encouraged to spend too much
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 in front of a screen. In conclusion,
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 the
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 of
computer
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 devices can be an aid in children's learning activities, I personally think that spending an excessive amount of
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 in front of a screen should not be encouraged owing to the possible negative influences on children's health, together with the prevalence of age inappropriate contents.
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