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In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. Discuss both systems.

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At the present time
marriage
 partners are chosen by
people
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the people
 themselves, but in the near past,
this
 decision was made by their parents. In my view, despite those parents don't wish bad
to
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for
 their
child
, people should choose by themselves who they
love
. Due to that, they will spend
whole their life
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their whole life
 together. The following essay will discuss both sides of
this
 issue. Since the dawn of the time, the
marriage
was
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has been
 an important part of our life. Because of that choice of a partner is a tough decision and people have to consider all details before the
marriage
. In the near past children almost hadn't rights to choose
partner
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a partner
 by themselves, in fact, only parents could decide who their
child
 is going to marry. Parents raised a
child
 and all decisions related to their
child
 should be made by them. Parents know their
kid
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kids
 better than everyone and when they are giving them in
marriage
, they are taking into account the character of
kid
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the kid
a kid
. But currently
this
 situation has been changed, due to that some parents aren’t concerned about the future of their
child
 and trying to give their
child
 to a family which is rich, it is not always fair towards to children. Without
love
, there is no future for their kids and
as a result
, it leads to divorce. Even
then
, there are no ideal people and everyone could make a mistake, even when they are choosing their future partner by themselves. People always fall in
love
 with each other before the
marriage
. After that, their relationships would become colder and it
also
 could lead to divorce. After analysing both sides of
this
 issue, I've concluded that in spite of those
parents taking
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parents, taking
 into account all details, sometimes they
are forgotten
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forget
 about
love
. The main thing
of
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about
marriage
 is to bind two people which are in
love
 with each other.
Thus
, people should choose whom they
love
by
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with
 themselves.
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