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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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It is considered by some that accepting of
negative situation
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a negative situation
 is more advantages, while they are others who think that it is better to overcome
such
unfavorable
not encouraging or approving or pleasing
unfavourable
 circumstances. Both viewpoints will be discussed in
this
 essay. On the one hand, people cannot avoid
bad situation
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bad situations
the bad situation
a bad situation
such
 as disappointing job or miserable living conditions, even they did not want it they have to accept it.
such
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Such
 as, if the person who do not have positive thinking will be
suffer
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suffering
 from stress and make things worse. Those who dare to face hardship will become more resilient and a better person over time.
For instance
, one of the most famous celebrities Rowan Atkinson, who interests in acting and enrolled in a comedy group through his early life.
However
, a lot of TV shows rejected him because of his speaking disorder and ugly face but he still believes himself. After lots of rejection, he started his own show “Mr.Bean”, which became a global SUCCESS.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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