with increase in global tourism it has become obvious that there are many advantages and disadvantages that can be found from the effects of tourism. do you believe advantages outweigh disadvantages?

Since the
tourism
has been increasing around the world, it is true that there are many advantages and disadvantages may have due to effects of
tourism
. In my opinion,
tourism
has many advantages like,
increase
in the
economy
of the country, and
also
it increases the network of tourists. In
this
globalized world, people
are intend
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intend
are intended
to save their time for
tourism
, but there are some drawbacks which are
effected
acted upon; influenced
affected
by the tourists is robbery. Tourists who visited different place are vulnerable, because
their
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they're
things, or money may
stolen
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steal
by others.
For instance
, there are many robbery complaints in the famous historical places.
Moreover
, it
also
has
impact
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an impact
on the traffic. Due to
increase
in tourists, there is an
increase
in the
population which
Accept comma addition
population, which
results in traffic in urban areas
such
as in
charminar
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Charminar
, which is famous historical place, the traffic is very complicated.
Although
there are disadvantages, there are many advantages like
increase
in the
economy
of
nation
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the nation
a nation
nations
. If a country has many historical monuments,
then
the
tourism
will
expanded
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expand
, and tourists spend more money to visit the places.
For example
, the income obtained from the ticket fee of famous place will be used for
further
renovation and implementing new facilities which increases their
economy
of their domestic area.
Additionally
, it
also
has an advantage of
increase
in
networking
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the networking
of tourists, because it involves in learning
new language
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a new language
, new culture and their history.
For instance
,
bussiness
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
persons can open their companies in many different countries globally. To conclude,
advantages
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the advantages
outweigh the disadvantages in terms of
increase
in
counties
Suggestion
the county's economy
county's economy
county economy
economy
, and network of tourists by
tourism
.
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