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Some people prefer to play team sports, while others prefer to play individual sports. Discuss advantages of each. Then indicatewhich you prefer and why?

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Sports are
essential part
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an essential part
essential parts
 of person's life. Some masses said that
team
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sports
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sport
 is better than individual sports, while others reckon that playing individual sports like swimming and golf are more beneficial for them. I will explain the merits of both sports in my
further
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 crumb
of
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in
 writing. To commence with, there are
myraid
too numerous to be counted
myriad
 benefits of
team
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 sports as in
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this
plural of "this"
these
 players understand and cooperate with each other to play against competitive
team
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.
For example
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, there are eight or nine players in football
team
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 which play together to make goals against the opposite
team
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. Apart from
this
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, players play according to the instructions given by their captain as
captain
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the captain
give
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gives
 them instructions how to play and they have to follow it.
On the other hand
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, the individual sports
also
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 have a plethora of
advantages like
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advantages, like
 player is free and independent so they can follow their own techniques and tricks to win. There are many sports which play individually like swimming, badminton, table tennis, golf and
weightlifting which
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weightlifting, which
 play at nation and international level and
also
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 bring medals for our country.
For example
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, a recent player of female wrestling, Geeta Phogat, bring many trophies and medals for
country
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the country
. To conclude, I would like to say that sports is crucial for every mass whether it is
team
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 sports or individual sports, both have their own advantages.

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