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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #fuels
Cars have become an important part of our lives, we all drive it to go wherever we want to. According to me, it will be a good move to ban the use of fossil fuels to run the
car
 and to replace it with electric cars. Pollution is increasing with each day and fossil fuels are getting decreased proportionally. The number of cars is increasing each day, now there is at least one
car
 in each house and so more traffic on the roads that lead to air pollution and which in turn leads to several health problems too
for example
 breathing problems. Using an electric
car
 as compared to the one with fossil fuel is safer because petrol/diesel is highly flammable which can result in loss of
car
to
Suggestion
in
 loss of life. The most important reason to support
this
 ban is to save fossil fuels from getting extinct as they are the non-renewable sources of energy. So, in my opinion, it will be a good idea to replace the fuel cars with electric cars.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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