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Some people think it is important to spend a lot of money on a wedding celebration, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #money #celebration
Wedding is an interesting and important moment in life.
Therefore
 people want to celebrate it especially. Most of people spend a lot of
money
 on a wedding celebration, while others disagree. I think, it has importance to celebrate wedding together with family and friends and not waste
money
. On the one hand, people want to wonder their guests so they should spend a lot of
money
 on it.
Bride
Suggestion
The bride
 and
groom
 need in new beautiful suits, restaurant,
wedding performance
Accept comma addition
wedding, performance
 and many other expensive things. They feel the importance of
this
 moment and try not save
money
 for all wedding items.
For example
, newlyweds can buy not cheap tour on a honeymoon.
In addition
, many wedding agencies offer turnkey wedding. They take care of everything that can worry newlyweds.
On the other hand
, people may not spend a lot of
money
 and make
wedding day
Suggestion
the wedding day
a wedding day
 marvellous.
Bride
Suggestion
The bride
 and
groom
 should think what is important and
what
Suggestion
what's
 not, where they can save
money
. Of course, it depends on people;
however
, I think, young people
such
 as student can save
money
, because their friends the same students and they
not need
Suggestion
don't need
aren't needing
 expensive restaurants or exotic cars.
Moreover
, students have more free time for handmade;
for example
, they can make decorations and gifts for guests. At the same time, I think, a wedding is an important day of life;
however
, people should not spend all their
money
 on it or what is worse to take a debt. I agree, for
bride
Suggestion
the bride
 and
groom
is
Suggestion
are
 difficult to take a right choice. They should compare many prices and offers that not easy to keep the mind. In conclusion, people should pay attention to not to waste
money
 on a wedding, because a big volume of
money
can not
can not
cannot
 make them happy.
Bride
Suggestion
The bride
 and
groom
 will happy, if they have a wedding day with family and close friends in a friendly atmosphere.
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