More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Obesity which
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Obesity, which
is more and more
popluar
regarded with great favor, approval, or affection especially by the general public
popular
people
with children in developed countries.
Overweighting
makes people tired of their work.In which making a lot of
weathy
having an abundant supply of money or possessions of value
wealthy
wealthier
nations standstill year by year.
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In
fact, Growing nations were alerted about
this
primely
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situation. One of the
significant
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signs
for a rise in the weight of children is the eating
habit
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habits
and unhealthy
food
.
This
is
beacause
for the reason that; on account of
because
adult
peoples
a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution
pupils
worked most of their
time
and have no
time
to prepare
meal
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a meal
meals
the meal
for own kids.So fast
food
is the best choice for them.Beside junk
food
is absolutely more
adivcted
compulsively or physiologically dependent on something habit-forming
addicted
educated
and
tasty
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tastier
more tasty
than
famliy
a social unit living together
family
meal and going with
that is
high fat and calories are consumed.
In contrast
, fast
food
is suitable for people who do not have
time
for eating. In the real world, fast
food
industries are growing faster day by day
.
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.
Limiting high-calories things should be done quickly. Connecting with many diseases may able to kill human after a short
time
such
as heart-disease
,
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,
high-blood.
Furthermore
,
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,
if bad eating habit still not be controlled, country's
enconomy
the system of production and distribution and consumption
economy
, future generation
are effected
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is effected
enormously due to
this
problem. In
conclustion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
,
gorverment
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the government
government
should have more attention for human life.Not only helping
young generation
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the young generation
out of risky
threaten but
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threaten, but
also
maintaining or
may be
by chance
maybe
growthing
a barrier that has parallel or crossed bars blocking a passage but admitting air
grating
frothing
gracing
more in the future.So be
apart
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a part
of it to make the life is worth to live.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • sedentary
  • caloric intake
  • processed foods
  • fast food culture
  • screen time
  • metabolic disorders
  • healthcare expenditure
  • lifestyle diseases
  • preventative strategies
  • nutritional education
  • public health policy
  • body mass index (BMI)
  • emotional well-being
  • stigmatization
  • exercise regimen
  • eating habits
  • junk food
  • socioeconomic factors
  • health literacy
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