Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Taking

photograph

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photographs

of famous people is a popular job in everywhere.People want to know more about how their

icon

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icon's

life

and

this

is why regular activities is followed by

paparazzi

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the paparazzi

.Some pupils think

celebrities's

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celebrities'

celebrity's

life

pays back them personal's

life

. The reason is

papparazzi

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paparazzi

is a work and people have

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has at work and people

is at work and people have

to do their job.Like other jobs, we have to do to earn our salary.

How ever people

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However, people

However people

should respect other

life

and they

spect

expel or eject (saliva or phlegm or sputum) from the mouth

spit

speak

spent

back what you are doing.

For example

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Dam Vinh Hung had

publiced

prepared and printed for distribution and sale

published

publicized

his mother's news to the reporter by

volunteer

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volunteers

and pleasure to answer any questions.

Mean while some

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Meanwhile, some

Meanwhile some

else is doing for reputation.Some of them

doing

the act that results in something coming to be

making

every even giving a

rumor

gossip (usually a mixture of truth and untruth) passed around by word of mouth

rumour

which is

create

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created

themself

reflexive form of "them"

themselves

.In Vietnam

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one of the most famous

singer

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singers

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who is the

first

pioner

open up an area or prepare a way

pioneer

for electric music

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has

growth

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grown

grow

up like today have

drop

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dropped

off his career

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Because of pressure from

audience

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the audience

came from

unknow

not known

unknown

picture about

bulleting

fail to agree with; be in violation of; as of rules or patterns

violating

blasting

deleting

his girlfriend. In the real world a lot of ways to take a picture about celebrity's

life

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life, such

such

as asking them

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set

apointment

the act of putting a person into a non-elective position

appointments

appointment

and

refers to the speaker or writer

think they will

happy

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happily

if you guys do that.

Actually it

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Actually, it

also improve

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also improves

has also improved

relationship each other.

However it

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However, it

is a change for more

informations

a message received and understood

information

in the news and get closer to the promotion opportunity.Everyone should have their own time not everything we see is what it means like that.In some case

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the solution they do is

reasonable but

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reasonable, but

not suitable or not right with others.In

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you but

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you, but

no one else can help you out of your problem. In conclusion

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any kind of work has their own disadvantaged and from my

opion

a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty

opinion

of view I think

paparazzi

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the paparazzi

should follow and take

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photographs

but in a polite way.

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, the demand

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for

general public

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a general public

that causes the development of

country's economy

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the country's economy

a country's economy

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