Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each crime. others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Unfortunately, people commit crimes every day. Each country has developed the
rules
for handling it.
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these
rules
depend on the past of the person and
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around a
crime
. Let's try to discuss whether is good or not to have
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non strict
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rules
for making the final judgment. We can't stress enough that removing
context
from
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decision obviously will make every situation more simple. After that, all
rules
will be transformed
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simple mapping between the
crime
and the punishment. On the one side, it will help to make judgements faster and decrease the error rate of wrong decisions. On the other side, decisions will become
more crude
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and mean for most
of
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the
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people. The
context
is important to make the right decision. I will try to describe one situation to show that. Let's imagine that you are a tourist trying to buy a bus ticket in
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country with a different language. Because of the lack of
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you ended up with the wrong type of document for travelling. It would be
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to treat you as
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a native
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speaker who is doing the same
crime
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regular basis. I think we should always consider the circumstances when we are making the final decisions. We can not equally judge people who have done the
crime
by mistake. In conclusion, we can see that the
context
of committing
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a crime
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can radically change the severity of
person
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in society. And if look at
present
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experience of many different countries we can see that the
context
of committing crimes is important.
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