When a new town is planned, it is more important to develop public parks and sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their time in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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When it comes to planning a new town, there are many issues that are challenging both government and citizens. Some people argue that public parks and sports facilities should be attracted more significance than shopping malls. From my standpoint, I do agree with

this

point of view.

First

, it is clear that some cities, especially which are in urbanization, which are faced with many environmental problems

such

as air pollution, or increasing in rubbish.

Thus

, green spaces play an important role in helping everyone have a place to calm after a hard day. Nowadays, people tend to apply in office jobs, so they may spend less time in out-door activities because of the particularity of the work.

Hence

, the government should invest money to construct workout locations in order to encourage residents to engage in physical activity, to enhance body conditions. It cannot be neglected the importance of commercial centres in providing essential items and services for daily life.

For instance

, women who need raw materials for dinner can easily find the fresh one available in supermarkets.

However

, constitution of citizens is the priority factor toward a new town. If health state is shielded, labour productivity can reach the peak.

As a result

, the economy has seen a remarkable growth step. In conclusion,

although

plazas are truly necessary for living, I believe that it is better built public parks and sports facilities ahead of shopping centres, since they can accommodate everybody with a wide space to relax and spend their leisure.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

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When a new town is planned, it is more important to develop public parks and sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their time in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Some people think that we should invent a new language for international communication. Will the benefits of this outweigh the problems associated with it?

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