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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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These days, many people are doing their own business
instead
 of working for private sectors or institutions. There are several reasons why people choose self-employments;
however
, there have many drawbacks of being self-employed. There are two main reasons why people want to do their own business. The main reason is for earning lots of
money
. Running their own business gives them a chance to make more
money
 because they don't need to share their profits with others, the harder they can work, the more profit they will get. The
second
 reason is for independence and freedom. People will be free from u
ndune
not yet payable
undue
pressure on boss
such
 as they do not need to worry about making the profit to meet with the target goal of their products at a given time that forced by their employers.
Therefore
, a lot of people are choosing self-employment for getting more
money
 and being independence.
Nevertheless
, there are some problems to be self-employed. They have to take on more responsibility for many issues
such
 as finical crisis, customers and worker problems. So, they will be stressful for taking action on these problems. Unless they careful for
such
 issue, they would be bankrupt and
finally
 they will become unemployed.
Furthermore
, if a person work full time job for long hours, he will not have enough time for family and friends, so he will be isolated and distant with his environment. In conclusion, choosing their own employment would be paid more
money
 and freedom,
however
, there has some disadvantages that they can suffer from their work
such
 as full of stress and isolation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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