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Some people think high school graduates should travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to study at university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is common for a student to take a gap-
year
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 in a foreign country or even
work
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 for a
year
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 prior to
university
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. Whether a student should engage in travelling or working before embarking on a formal qualification has been a topic of debate for various years.
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 the advantages of
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 activities will be discussed, followed by all the economical disadvantages one encounters on
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 endeavours. The benefits of resisting
university
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 for a
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 to travel or
work
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 open the s
tudents
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student's
mind to new worlds,
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 as having responsibility at
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 or learning a new language abroad. Having spent a
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 in Australia prior to
university
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 I learnt how to look for
work
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, become responsible with finances and other essential life skills
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 as cooking. Upon starting
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 various tasks
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 as money management and employment were
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nature, thus
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 allowing more time for studies. Without having gone abroad
university
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 life would undoubtedly be more challenging. The disadvantages are mainly cost related, the airfare, travel insurance, national insurance and personal living costs are large sums.
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owever finding
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However, finding
another opportunity to go abroad is difficult once the pattern of normal life is resumed.
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addition, it
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 an opportunity to experiment with different jobs before choosing a career at
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niversity.
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the university
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Therefore, there
is a considerable advantage of taking a
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 out before higher education. To conclude, the main disadvantages are the costs involved,
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 the benefits dramatically outweigh the disadvantages. Time should be spent wisely as it can never be recuperated unlike m
oney which
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money, which
can be spent and earned.

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