Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Providing a health job atmosphere is one of the most significant aspects of a perfect job.
Unfortunately most
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Unfortunately, most
of people ignore
this
very important issue which
can be lead
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can lead
to a variety of disorders for them. There are some ways to help
resolving
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resolve
this
problem which will be mentioned in
this
essay. There are several possible reasons that people do not exercise in their workplaces: one important factor
contribute
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contributes
this
problem is lack of free
time
for individuals during their working
time
.
In other words
in their work timetable there is no enough free
time
for performing other activities which are unrelated to work. Another possible reason might be
poor availability
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the poor availability
of
sport
facilities. There is no
deny
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denying
to
fact
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the fact
that if there were no
sport
facilities and
sport
places, it would be hard to think about exercising. There are
simple practical
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simple, practical
solutions which can be considered as suitable ways for solving the above mentioned problems.
Firstly
, an effective way for handling little free
time
for working people could be incorporating more free
time
daily so they would be able to spend
this
time
for their healthy activities.
Secondly
, employers should allocate budget for providing
sport
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sports
facilities
as a
result even
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result, even
reluctant people encouraged to exercise.

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