Some countries are struggling with increases in crime rates. Some believe that having more police on the streets is best way to reduce and combat crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The major problem all
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The major problem with all
countries around the world is to reduce the rate of criminal activities. The duty of controlling
crime
and take criminal into custody is of
police
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the police
. They are responsible to enforce law and order in the society. Some people argue that increasing the number of
police
officer
in
street
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the street
would reduce
rate
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rates
of
crime
significantly. I partially agree with the given argument.
Firstly
, increasing the number of
police
officer
in
street
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the street
will definitely discourage criminal to conduct their misdeeds.
Furthermore
,
Police
officer
will educate and inform general public about legal and illegal conducts.
This
will eventually make people more aware about actions that are against their constitution.
For example
,
sometime
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
people commit
crime
because of being unaware of
legal status
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the legal status
of certain action.
Presence
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The presence
of
police
officer
all around the place will eliminate
this
kind of situation.
In contrast
,
crime
doesn't take place only
on
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in
open places.
Voilance
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The balance
Balance
Villains
being conducted inside building and house cannot be addressed property by
policeman
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a policeman
on
street
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the street
. Some kind of
voilance
an act of aggression (as one against a person who resists)
violence
vigilance
don't make
loud sound
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a loud sound
loud sounds
.
For example
, a
women
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woman
constantly beaten and misbehaved by his husband cannot be overtaken through
officer
on
street
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the street
. It needs alternative solution
such
as hotline numbers and emergency phone numbers as well as some counselling.
In addition
, people
usually ignore to
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usually ignore
report
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the report
, which cause
further
escalation of the situation and eventually can cause unfortunate result. In conclusion, it's a good idea to increase
number
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the number
of
policeman
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policemen
in
street
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the street
in order to maintain law and order in open public space. But, all the crimes are not seen openly. Some crimes are conducted inside four
wall which
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walls, which
walls which
cannot be
forseen
realize beforehand
foreseen
.
Finally
, proper access to law enforcers by
general public
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the general public
is
more important issue
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the most important issue
most important issue
.
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