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Some people believe that it is good idea to express their point of view and ideas through social media however others believe opposite do you agree or disagree

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The planet earth has been witnessed many wars and conflicts since the time of immemorial. Some believe that women leaders can reduce the number of
such
 incidences;
however
, there remains some disagreement and many consider man can be the best ruler. In my opinion, I, believe that these all entirely depend on various situations of that particular time period.
First
 of all, it is an indisputable fact that there are many factors which can lead to unrest and conflicts in the society.
For instance
, exploitation from the higher authority that resulting social imbalance and lack of security within the system, especially under British rules between 16 th and 19 th century. They used to rule around the world and exploited native people for money, material, and power. Slowly and steadily, people joined together and fought to bring back the freedom and independence of their place from their rulers, either they were king or queen.
In other words
, both male and female rulers exploited weaker sections of the society;
therefore
, I, personally, think that nothing to do with gender when it comes to the power.
However
, despite the above mentioned factors, another problem
such
 as poverty, family problems, and unemployment
also
 cause problems in the society, Under no circumstances do not people effected mind who is their head of the authority whether male or female.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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