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The charts below show the percentage of monthly household income spent on various items by two different groups in one European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of monthly household income spent on various items by two different groups in one European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
two
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 pie chart illustrates the monthly
income
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 spent by high and
low salary
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low-salary
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 groups on various day-to-day life items in one European nation. Given data are calibrated in percentage.
Overall
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,
lower
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the lower
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 salary
group
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 spent more on Food and drinks and lesser on transportation;
however
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, the
high
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high-income
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income
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group
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 spent more on miscellaneous
whereas
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,least on clothing.
High
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High-income
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income
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group
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 spent nearly double and triple their
income
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 on Recreation, culture and Restaurant/hotels segments respectively as compared to
other
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another group
other groups
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group
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.
Low
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Low-income
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income
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group
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 people
sent
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spent
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 half of their money on Food and drinks and paying fuel bills. But, rich
pupil
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pupils
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 spent only 22% on these
two
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 household items. There is only
7
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a 7
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% and 4% difference in spending on transportation and
miscellaneous
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the miscellaneous
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 sector between the
two
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group
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groups
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 respectively.
High
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High-income
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income
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 people spent more on these
two
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 items as compared to
Low
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Low-income
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income
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group
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. Both these
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group
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groups
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 spent approximately equal numbers on clothing i.e 5%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, income, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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