Some people believe teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit the teenagers and the community as well. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Share personal examples if applicable.

For the betterment of society and youngsters, some people feel that youngsters should spare their leisure
time
by doing unpaid
community
work
. I completely agree with
this
point and in
this
essay I will support my view with e
xample.
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examples
an example
One of the most significant benefits of teenager's involvement in social
work
is increasing their level of awareness of social issues. Young p
eople mostly
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people, mostly
unaware of communal problems so if they enrolled themselves for free social
w
ork
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work, then
then
they will realise the gravity of p
articular problem
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a particular problem
and
also
could be able to provide a piece of advice.
For instance
, I worked for the NGO from Pune, India formed by college-going students and took volunteer participation in c
lean Narmada river program.
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the clean Narmada river program
Thus
, as per my experience, I feel that to develop adolescents’ likings in
community
work
, people should encourage them.
Furthermore
, spending free
time
in engaging communal activities would develop t
eenager's interest
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a teenager's interest
in politics, social
work
, and public sector services. The reason for
this
is, nowadays, most of the children spend their spare
time
by watching some TV programs or by playing computer games. If they start investing that
time
doing
community
tasks, they might start thinking to become a politician or a social worker or a public service agent to help
c
ommunity
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communities
the community
grow faster. To illustrate
this
point, students from Akhil Bharatiya Vidyarthi Parishad (ABVP) fought for Maharashtra state assembly election
last
year and got u
nbelievable response
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an unbelievable response
from p
ublic
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the public
as they have done tremendous social
work
before.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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