Some people think that sport teaches children how to compete, while others believe that children learn teamwork. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Apart from keeping us physically fit
,
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,
sports do have
certain positive impact
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a certain positive impact
on our mental health.It helps us in learning some valuable lessons in life like
team
work
and how to compete. Sports have a multidisciplinary impact on human life. Being a social animal and living in a competitive society like ours it’s very important to know how to
work
in a
team
and simultaneously compete with each other
.
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.
Whether someone is working in a big multinational company or thinking of some startups
,
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,
it’s the effort of the whole
team
which makes it successful. Some people in our society
believes
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believe
that sports
only teaches
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only teach
students to compete
.
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.
They believe it’s a healthy way through which children understand their strengths against competitors and
work
on their
weakness
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weaknesses
.While the other part of
this
society keeps a belief that sports helps in developing
team spirit
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a team spirit
. While playing sports like football and cricket a child understands the importance of
team
work
. Some days might be challenging for
particular player
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a particular player
and in those days one understands the importance of
team
the most. A
team
with good motivation and enthusiasm will make a player to give
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
best even on his worst days. In my opinion
,
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,
sports
teaches
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teach
us
team
work
as well as it generates in us the spirit to compete. One gets pushed by
ambition
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the ambition
by
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of
seeing his
team
mate performing
good
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well
better
best
. By improving his skills he is ultimately giving benefits to his
team
.Not only
this but
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this, but
sports
also
help one to relief their stress. Sports are helping
individual
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individuals
the individual
to become proficient in most prospects of their life.

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