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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Although
 every
country
 strives harder and
putforth
Suggestion
put forth
 their effort to grow from a developing to developed nation,
its
it is
it's
 still unfortunate to know they could not completely eradicate poverty.
Thus
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This
 leads to
suffering
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the suffering
 of poor people from food, clothes and shelter. Handling these people is often challenging and each
country
 has their own policies and laws to manage them. Every
country
 has two types of
region
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regional
, rural and urban. Growth of a
country
 should be in
such
 a way that every nook and corner of the nation
is benefited
Suggestion
are benefiting
are benefited
 uniformly. Whenever there is an imbalance in development occurs between the urban and rural areas, there the poverty pitch in.
Country
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A country
 like India have seen a tremendous growth over the century in terms of
economy
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the economy
 and
life style but
Accept comma addition
lifestyle, but
lifestyle but
 the development is evident only in major cities like Mumbai, Chennai,
Banaglore
an industrial city in south central India (west of Chennai)
Bangalore
 etc.,
Inspite
heighten or intensify
inspire
 to
high cost
Suggestion
the high cost
 of living, people still migrate to these cities from rural areas due to several reasons like job opportunity, quality of
eduction
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
 and living standard.
Thus
Suggestion
This
 leads to non availability of workers in agriculture and small scale industries, which
inturn
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in turn
 affects the people rely income only from these industries in rural areas.
This
 imbalance in growth affects people on the opposite leading to poverty. War on
terrorisom
the calculated use of violence (or the threat of violence) against civilians in order to attain goals that are political or religious or ideological in nature; this is done through intimidation or coercion or instilling fear
terrorism
on the other hand
, which often results in
loss
Suggestion
the loss
 of
civilians
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civilian
civilian's
civilians'
 life and their homes.
Womens
Suggestion
Women
,
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
 and elders who lost their family during these wars become poor and strives for food, clothes and shelter.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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