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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor.What are some of the reasons for world poverty ? how can the poor be helped ?

#country #people #world #poverty
Poor people are found all over the globe
inspite
Suggestion
in spite
 of their country's development.
Foremost reason
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The foremost reason
 for world
poverty
 is unemployment
,
Accept space
,
which drives many people towards the
poverty
 line. It can be resolved by improving the
employment
 opportunities. One of the reasons for global
poverty
 is unemployment
.
Accept space
.
In an economy where all the people are employed would be free from
poverty
. Unemployment proves the inability of the government to employ all the people.Based on
this
 topic, there is a Tamil
flim
a form of entertainment that enacts a story by sound and a sequence of images giving the illusion of continuous movement
film
 depicting the scenario of the economy during 80's.
Movie
Suggestion
The movie
 provides us a clear picture of four young people who suffer
poverty
 due to unemployment.The struggles they were undergoing, facing humiliations of other people and in different ways they are overcoming those has been technically
flimed
recorded on film; made into a movie
filmed
 by the director.
Inspite
Suggestion
In spite
 of the prevailing 'World
Poverty
' it can be reduced or completely detected from the economy through encouraging self
employment
 opportunities by providing
loan
Suggestion
loans
 for their business.The institutions or banks providing the loan must have track
on
Suggestion
of
 their business to eradicate loan waiving.In India government has
setup
Suggestion
set up
 a department for small and medium scale industries.Various
training
Suggestion
trainings
 are being provided by the technical persons to inculcate
employment
 opportunities in order to overcome
poverty
.
Globally they
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Globally, they
 are many measures taken by the government to eliminate
poverty
.Through increasing the
employment
 opportunities by providing them necessary wages can reduce or eradicate
poverty
.

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