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People eat more processed food than they did in the past. why is this? what are the effects of this?

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People ate healthy
food
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 in the past than in the present. A fast-paced routine has forced them towards processed
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food resulting
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food, resulting
 in poor health. People wake up and begin planning for the rest of the day, leaving home without breakfast. As they are occupied continuously with a pile of work, tend to miss lunch break. People are bound by tight deadlines to achieve targets, spending most of the time on the desk. In
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 competitive world, it is difficult to survive
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 a job and you are required to prove your potential at every moment.
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, they choose a fast-
food
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 to save time, so that they can have a meal simultaneously while working.
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, it is tastier to taste buds, harsh on the stomach.
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, people are costing their life in the event of getting paid more. The primary effect of consuming unhealthy
food
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 is bad health. It slowly deteriorates the internal body strength of a person, giving birth to many diseases and disorders. Processed
food
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 contains preservatives and additives which are very harmful to the human body.
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, it affects one's personality in terms of professional and personal.
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 could mean they under-perform at work and be more irritable at home. A recent survey showed that 20% of IT professionals tend to suffer
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from high cholesterol and
 blood pressure. In conclusion, due to the growing market and technology, people are extremely focused on
work sparing
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work, sparing
 less time to eat and
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 grabbing fast-
food
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 to kill hunger.

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