Money is important in most people’s lives. Although some people think it is more important than others. What do you feel are the right uses of money? What other factors are important for a good life? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

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Money
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is an inevitable factor in our lives. Some people think that
money
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has major impact i
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on
their daily l
ives others
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lives, others
have an opinion that there are o
ther certain components
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certain other components
which are important.
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essay will discuss both the use of
money
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as well as the other strands which gives value to our existence. I
ndeed financial
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Indeed, financial
wealth is an unavoidable part in a human’s life. Living of people depends on how much they are earning.
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, people live their lives based on how financially sound they are.
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, in some countries, a
ffluent
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the affluent
will get advanced and better health care in multi s
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Specialty
hospitals,
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it will not be possible if they are poverty-stricken.
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, providing for the family, to have advanced education and better life style and some pleasures like holiday trips, movies, and sports can be enjoyed only with
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.
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, financial freedom alone cannot bring happiness to an individual. Considering other factors like, family and friends have m
ajor impact
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a major impact
on everyone.
Money
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can reach you every corner of the world.
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, it will be meaningless if we lack a family and friends. Everyone will go through e
motional situation
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an emotional situation
where we need a back support. Being nice to others and accepted by people for what we have done
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add value. We need to be useful and help others. These all elements will bring pleasure.
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,
money
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is not only, or even m
ost important
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more important
factor in developing a good life, but it can certainly make a contribution.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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