in many countries around the world, life expectancy is increasing. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation and give your own opinion.

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In various nations around the

world

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, the average age

are rising

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is rising

magnificently. The essay will address the positive aspect and the demerit of the given issue and be concluded by my personal opinion.

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, the benefit of increased life expectancy is old people can be useful.

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, our life pace

are

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really fast, we don’t have time to do something is not necessary like housework, take care for your child. Our parent can contribute the time to help you. By way of example, they can look after our children or they can be an impressive story teller by telling fairy tales, folk tale,

etc

continuing in the same way

etc.

…

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old

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older

people can

also

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lead a society. Nowadays, almost nations need a rich-experienced people who know about the economic situation, good at diplomacy to lead their country for a better future, for the economic growth.

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, USA –

the most strongest

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the strongest

nation in the

world

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)

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)

led by Donald Trump. He is almost 73 years old with an excellent knowledge about the

world

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economic

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economy

economies

, an outstanding president.

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, increasing the average age will causes

over population

too much population

overpopulation

. There will be no place to live. The default for the elderly is a social burden.

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, China – the most populous nation, their living standard is really

high but

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high, but

there are still

remain

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remains

poor people that can’t afford to pay for it. In Hongkong, everything is expensive

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(

also

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the house rent

)

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)

so people choose to live in

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extremely small apartment.

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this

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problem can cause air pollution.

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, the amount of vehicles and industry are increasing as the number of

people growth

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a person's growth

person's growth

. The more vehicles are used, the more gas will be

release

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released

to the atmosphere. Air pollution

also

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causes

lungs

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lung

disease. By way of example, in India, air pollution is increasing rapidly because the use of vehicles, industries,

etc

continuing in the same way

etc.

… released the gas into the air so there will be more and more grime. In summary, the disadvantages of the increase of life expectancy outweigh the advantages. While the

world

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is developing

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is developed

by the leaders of each country, the pollutions, over population problems will continued happen and we have to find another solution to solve

this

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issue.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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369 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

life expectancy
demographics
societal development
healthcare system
pension funds
multigenerational
workforce
economic sustainability
intergenerational inequality
longevity
proactive policy
geriatrics
senior citizens
ageing population
fertility rates
dependency ratio

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in many countries around the world, life expectancy is increasing. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation and give your own opinion.

Computers and A.I. technology are increasingly being used for online education. Can Artificial intelligence enhance the learning experience? Is this a positive or negative development?

Some people feel that the government should regulate the level of the violence in films on television and at the cinema. Others feel that violent films should not be regulated. Dicuss both view

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The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?