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Libraries should be shut down as better alternatives are available.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #alternatives
For the time being, boundless development in technology has led to emergence of enormous alternatives
instead
 of customary way of approaching things including libraries. It has always been a controversial issue amongst people whether to keep the traditional libraries or replace all of them.
Although
 lots of rational reasons, which some will be
further
 mentioned, have been introduced in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of newly proposed options taking place of libraries, I highly believe we need to stick to the long-established perspective towards
this
 issue indicating that having libraries is vital.
Firstly
, it is argued that publishing books in order to sell and keep some at
libraries
Suggestion
the libraries
 will be harmful to environment in
long term
Suggestion
the long term
 as there is no other way in producing paper but cutting trees. While
this
 may be true, we cannot set fire to existing libraries and close them down since some signed editions are kept in libraries, which needs to be referred to in some cases.
Therefore
, it is vital that the books in libraries
be
Suggestion
are
 accessible to the ones who are fond of reading books and investigating our history.
Secondly
, some believe that through some technological advances you are in a position to have access to all sources at once conveniently. Others,
however
, are of the opinion that having access to
anything anytime
Accept comma addition
anything, anytime
 may lead to some crucial problems in all aspects;
for instance
, killing enthusiasm, creativity, and most importantly enhancing some academic erroneous attitudes as plagiarism.
Furthermore
, individuals congregate in a rather scholastic environment, which does not appear to be disadvantageous. In conclusion, I absolutely disagree that all the libraries have to be shut down. While, as is mentioned above, the proponents of
this
 idea are rightful in some particular situations, it is impossible to refuse
indispensable role
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the indispensable role
 of
library
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libraries
the library
 in the society.
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