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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Environment
 is a shared property between
government
 and the people. In my opinion the
resonsibility
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
 should
also
 be shared, rather than keeping the onus on one group. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views and will conclude why I feel it is a shared responsibility.
Government
 is responsible for making laws and issuing guidelines. With regards to the
environment
 the role of
government
 is to fix standards based on the current parameters and future assumptions. The
government
 can set fixed guidelines like, emission standards, waste disposal standards, etc. The
government
 should
also
 collect some user fee to sustain the methods in the form of taxes, surcharges and user fees. An individual should be responsible in keeping oneself updated with all the laws and comply with them. They are
also
 responsible in telling fellow citizens and helping them comply with the laws. Use of alternate fuels and other new energy forms should be taken up by the individuals. The individual
should
Suggestion
should also prompt
also
 be prompt in paying all the required fees and charges to the
government
 in
timely manner
Suggestion
a timely manner
, so
government
Suggestion
the government
 can give proper services. If either of the groups are lax in their responsibilities,
then
 there will be a huge loss to the
environment
. An individual alone cannot save the
enmvironment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
, while the
government
 itself is lax. The
government
 alone cannot save the
environment
, when the individuals are not complying with it.
Hence
 there should be a proper
cooperation
the state of lacking unity
separation
 between both individuals and
government
 and each should perform their responsibilities for saving the
environment
.
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