The graph and table below show average monthly temperatures and average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features.

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The graph illustrates information about the monthly average

temperatures

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in three

cities

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London

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, New

York

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and

Sydney

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and the table shows data about the number of hours of

sunshine

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in these

cities

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Overall

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Sydney

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and New

York

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received more

sunshine

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compared to

London

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Sydney

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received more

sunshine

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at the start and end of the

year

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whereas

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the other two

cities

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received more

sunshine

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in the

mid

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mid-year

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year

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London

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and New

York

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are cooler at the start of the

year

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till march with an average temperature under 15

degrees

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was followed by a rise in the temperature till

mid June

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mid-June

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, In July

London

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and New

York

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have their highest

temperatures

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recorded with nearly 20 and 30

degrees

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respectively.

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temperatures

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start to decrease till December. January is the coldest month in both

the

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apply

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cities

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hand

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,hand

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Sydney

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follows

different

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the different

a different

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trend, with

start

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the start

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and end of the

year

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have

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having

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high

temperatures

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reaching almost 25

degrees

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Sydney

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has cooler June, July and August compared to

other

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the other

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two

cities

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the

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apply

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where

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Sydney

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Sydney's

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temperature comes below 20

degrees

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Sydney

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and New

York

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people have more sunny mornings with 2453 and 2535 average annual hours respectively.

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London

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receives less than half of them.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, cities, london, york, sydney, sunshine, year, degrees with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

205 words

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The graph and table below show average monthly temperatures and average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features.

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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disavdantages to living in a house compared with living in an apartment

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