Some people think that having people from different nationalities and cultural background living together in the same country makes the country develop faster. Do you agree?

Difference, heterogeneity, plurality are terms which enable us to lead a richer life. And
this
can become a tangible reality with a society embracing
communities
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community
from different walks of life, from other cultures than their own as part of them. I completely agree with the viewpoint that ppl of different faiths, cultures and languages coming together lead to a cultural diversity which results in faster
development
of the nation politically, economically and culturally.
Firstly
, the communities coming from different countries bring diverse ideas along with them. These ideas help in the progression of the
country
in all fields.
For
example with
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example, with
the settlement of more Chinese communities has resulted in
greater advancement
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the greater advancement
in technology and science in Pakistan.
Therefore
, citizens are more aware of different types of technological advancement outside Pakistan.
Arts
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The arts
flourish because of the emergence of heterogeneous ideas foregrounded on account of cultural diversity.
Secondly
, when people from different backgrounds live together, they become more tolerant towards
eachother
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each other
. Because it gives them the snapshot of the different ethnicities outside their
country
, ppl are able to rise above and beyond their narrow mindset and embrace differences of all kinds. Not only it enables them to gain a more nuanced perspective of
life but
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life, but
, it provides
better understanding
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a better understanding
of their certain
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
Therefore
, more resources are spent in the
development
of the
country
rather than resolving the conflicts in society.
Finally
, these
culturally
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cultural
culture
diverse groups promote the tourism which forms the base income of many countries.
For
example countries
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example, countries
like Malaysia and Thailand generate their maximum income for the tourist industry.
This
development
of tourism becomes possible because
multiplicity
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the multiplicity
of faiths, culture and languages enable new historical heritages to develop.
This
helps
is establishing
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establish
a better image of the
country
across the world.
Moreover
, these people
also
help in the promotion of trade with different countries which helps establish a better economy since the flow of money in and out of the
country
stablizes
make stable and keep from fluctuating or put into an equilibrium
stabilizes
stabilize
stabilises
the financial status of any nation. To conclude, I believe that heterogeneous communities are much more successful as compared to
hemogenous
all of the same or similar kind or nature
homogeneous
ones as they help in faster
development
of a nation.
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